Commotion
Let it go
Let it stay
Let it run
But see it does not run away
Let it feel
Let it touch
Let it hold
But only till you can behold
Sweet noise
Purple dust
Morning and Twilight of dusk
Sincere love
Pathetic anyways ?
Sooth your heart
Open it
Smell it
But see that you don't hurt it
Don't eat it
It might not taste so good
As it looks to be
Be like that
Do like this
Compare
Don't Consult
Judge by your brain
Not your heart
Judge
By the ways
You have experienced
Life
And not by the
Ways taught to you
Sense it
And it will be yours
May be
Forever...
- Saswati Barat
1:14 Am
May 21,2009
What the hell is commotion in that?
ReplyDeleteWhat's 'it' in the poem?
If it is a flower
Consider again-
...Let it run
But see it does not run away...Why would it?
...Sweet noise...Never heard of a noisy flower!
...Don't eat it...!?
And if it is a man, a strange way to flirt...and honestly, mischievous.
Please make the point clear... my comments will follow!
And lastly, whom were you flirting?
(Sorry, if you took my jest seriously...no harm meant...honestly.)
Where did u get the idea it was a flower Krishanu ??? @_@ ??
ReplyDeleteI really like this piece of urs. If i am allowed to say --one of ur finest till date.
ReplyDeleteTruly there is a lot of commotion in the poem(yEs! FiNalLy I find a PoEm!!eeeh)
Anyway, the continuos struggle between ur heart and mind is quite evident..i agree with u..let it "run"..and go whereever it takes you.
As a song goes
"let ur love fly free"
I read the first comment and was LOL-ing all over the place...really @(O_o)@...i agreed with him on a post on a particular blog before i came here and saw this comment of his!!
Anway..dont let the commotion take over u as an individual or u might regret losing urself in the process(since this is a lesson i learnt quite recently, i think im capable of giving some 'gyaan')
Cheers
now "it" may have several meanings but i guess i'll predict tht it stands for love.. love needs freedom and not enuf freedom tht it "runs away"!!!
ReplyDeletenice rhyming!!
keep blogging!
@ Poetess .. thank you so much .. I am "honoured" u finally found one of my writings as a POEM ..:)and yes i agree to ur interpretation .. The commotion of heart and mind ...
ReplyDelete@ Parv .. yes . "it" has many meaning in the eyes who read it .. to you "it"meant that way .. a very successful meaning !! :)
Thank You .. Both of you
nice lines..and ya I would agree one of your best..thankx for the award I have put it on blog!!
ReplyDeletethank yo so much Rahul ":)
ReplyDeleteyou have nicely put feelings of heart and meeanings by mind in words,but in matters of heart,mind is always inexpereinced.
ReplyDeleteLady you're one of the bestest poets I have read in a long long time !!!
ReplyDeleteI read all your pieces on this page...you are awesme or what ?!!
And you say you call yourself "Nameless Fameless" ??! Thats blasphemy !!
Thnx a ton for visitng me, else I'da probably never known this wonderful space. I am so coming bakc, and linkin you meanwhile.
YOu rock Saswati !! You truly do.
Thank you so much darling .. i am really honoured.. thank you so so much :).. this is really encouraging... God bless you Cindrella ..
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